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Apocalypso

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We kissed the stars
On the last night
Of earth,
As the trees fell their leaves
On us,
Like acid rain.
Our lips were dark
With blood
The stains of love
And burning ember flames.

The clouds broke
Into our minds.
Their vapour wings
Touching thought.
Our memories disappeared
Into our hands
And formed a gentle scar
(Of rememberance.)

You trembled as the shadows
Touched.
And all lights
Went out.



We mourned the sky
As the heavens fell.
Our tears tasted
Of secrets and regret
Bittersweet under the light.
You held my hand
Tight
As the insects sung
An elegy of life.

We breathed deep
And held our moment
Like a lover
In our souls.
You whispered my name
Into my spine,
And your lips were cold.
Beneath the broken sky
We spoke a prayer
As though it was a curse.

We kissed the stars
On our last night
On earth.
I don't know. it's strange, I know.
I wrote it five minutes ago.
I don't know where it came from.

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beigegray's avatar
You whispered my name
Into my spine
And your lips were cold.


Wow, stunning. I like this piece for many reasons, the first being that the shortness of the lines works quite well. It's short without being too choppy. Short spelling thing-- "(Of rememberance.)" to "remembrance." ?

I'm not sure if I like the ".." right before the piece shifts. Frankly, it's sort of juvenile. A more reformed "-" or just space might suffice. I also noticed that you didn't use any commas, which is fine, but they might contribute to a smoother flow, especially here:
As the trees fell their leaves
On us
Like acid rain.


Overall, great poem. I hope you like some of what I've said, you definitely don't have to take my advice. :heart:

You held my hand
Tight
As the insects sung
An elegy of life.

Stunning :nod: